âme hirsute (extrait)

par Claire, vendredi 02 octobre 2015, 19:58 (il y a 3137 jours) @ L. Igel

oui, pas mal d'emphase et quelques procédés....faut continuer à travailler, aller vers plus de simplicité, de véracité.
ce sont des erreurs du début, c'est pas forcément grave.

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âme hirsute (extrait) - L. Igel, 02/10/2015, 10:19
- âme hirsute (extrait) - dh, 02/10/2015, 10:25
  - âme hirsute (extrait) - julienb, 02/10/2015, 14:09
    - âme hirsute (extrait) - catr, 03/10/2015, 05:00
    - âme hirsute (extrait) - kelig, 03/10/2015, 14:21
  - âme hirsute (extrait) - L. Igel, 02/10/2015, 16:19
    - âme hirsute (extrait) - dh, 02/10/2015, 16:22
      - âme hirsute (extrait) - catr, 02/10/2015, 17:11
        
        âme hirsute (extrait) - L. Igel, 02/10/2015, 22:02
      - âme hirsute (extrait) - L. Igel, 02/10/2015, 22:01
        
        âme hirsute (extrait) - catr, 03/10/2015, 00:54
      - âme hirsute (extrait) - LECTRICE :)), 03/10/2015, 19:11
        
        âme hirsute (extrait) - kelig, 03/10/2015, 19:42
    - âme hirsute (extrait) - Claire, 02/10/2015, 19:58
      - âme hirsute (extrait) - L. Igel, 02/10/2015, 22:01
        
        âme hirsute (extrait) - Claire, 02/10/2015, 23:12
        
        âme hirsute (extrait) - catr, 03/10/2015, 00:56
      - âme hirsute (extrait) - catr, 03/10/2015, 18:01
    - âme hirsute (extrait) - LECTRICE :)), 03/10/2015, 19:10
      - âme hirsute (extrait) - kelig, 03/10/2015, 19:29
    - âme hirsute (extrait) - catr, 03/10/2015, 20:23
    - âme hirsute (extrait) - Rémy, 05/10/2015, 03:46
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      - âme hirsute (extrait) - Claire, 06/10/2015, 12:36
      - âme hirsute (extrait) - kelig, 06/10/2015, 12:39
- âme hirsute (extrait) - catr, 03/10/2015, 05:23
  - âme hirsute (extrait) - L. Igel, 04/10/2015, 10:15
  - Un ou deux micropouems pour catrire - Rémy, 05/10/2015, 03:17
    - Un ou deux micropouems pour rémy - catr, 05/10/2015, 14:28
- âme hirsute (extrait) - casimir, 03/10/2015, 13:35
  - âme hirsute (extrait) - kelig, 03/10/2015, 13:40
- âme hirsute (extrait) - kelig, 03/10/2015, 14:06
  - âme hirsute (extrait) - catr, 03/10/2015, 15:46
    - âme hirsute (extrait) - kelig, 03/10/2015, 15:51
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      - âme hirsute (extrait) - L. Igel, 04/10/2015, 10:35
    - âme hirsute (extrait) - Claire, 03/10/2015, 17:00
      - âme hirsute (extrait) - catr, 03/10/2015, 17:42
        
        âme hirsute (extrait) - Claire, 03/10/2015, 21:33
        
        âme hirsute (extrait) - catr, 03/10/2015, 23:21
        
        âme hirsute (extrait) - Claire, 03/10/2015, 23:37
        
        âme hirsute (extrait) - catr, 04/10/2015, 00:15
        
        âme hirsute (extrait) - catr, 05/10/2015, 16:23
    - âme hirsute (extrait) - L. Igel, 04/10/2015, 10:33
      - âme hirsute (extrait) - catr, 05/10/2015, 16:16
        
        âme hirsute (extrait) - julienb, 05/10/2015, 16:18
        
        âme hirsute (extrait) - catr, 05/10/2015, 16:41
        
        âme hirsute (extrait) - Rémy, 11/10/2015, 00:12
        
        âme hirsute (extrait) - catr, 11/10/2015, 00:25
        
        Mais nooooon - Rémy, 11/10/2015, 00:41
        
        Mais nooooon + - catr, 11/10/2015, 00:45
        
        Mais nooooon + - Rémy, 11/10/2015, 01:01
        
        Mais nooooon + - catr, 11/10/2015, 01:05
        
        Mais nooooon + - catr, 11/10/2015, 01:13
        
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        âme hirsute (extrait) - L. Igel, 05/10/2015, 19:55
        
        âme hirsute (extrait) - catr, 05/10/2015, 20:08
        
        âme hirsute (extrait) - Claire, 06/10/2015, 12:45
        
        âme hirsute (extrait) - catr, 06/10/2015, 13:47
        
        âme hirsute (extrait) - Claire, 06/10/2015, 14:32
        
        âme hirsute (extrait) - catr, 06/10/2015, 14:51
        
        âme hirsute (extrait) - Claire, 06/10/2015, 15:35
        
        âme hirsute (extrait) - catr, 06/10/2015, 15:42
        
        âme hirsute (extrait) - catr, 06/10/2015, 16:08
        
        âme hirsute (extrait) - Claire, 06/10/2015, 16:10
        
        âme hirsute (extrait) - julienb, 06/10/2015, 16:13
        
        âme hirsute (extrait) - catr, 06/10/2015, 16:16
        
        âme hirsute (extrait) - catr, 06/10/2015, 16:13
        
        d'amour me font - Claire, 06/10/2015, 16:44
        
        âme hirsute (extrait) - catr, 06/10/2015, 16:48
        
        âme hirsute (extrait) - Claire, 06/10/2015, 16:54
        
        âme hirsute (extrait) - catr, 06/10/2015, 14:10
        
        âme hirsute (extrait) - L. Igel, 06/10/2015, 14:49
        
        âme hirsute (extrait) - catr, 06/10/2015, 14:54
        
        âme hirsute (extrait) - catr, 06/10/2015, 15:35
        
        âme hirsute (extrait) - catr, 06/10/2015, 15:02
        
        âme hirsute (extrait) - Claire, 06/10/2015, 15:28
        
        âme hirsute (extrait) - catr, 06/10/2015, 15:33
        
        @ Claire - catr, 06/10/2015, 15:30
        
        @ Claire - Claire, 06/10/2015, 16:01
        
        âme hirsute (extrait) - L. Igel, 06/10/2015, 15:54
        
        âme hirsute (extrait) - Claire, 06/10/2015, 16:03
        
        âme hirsute (extrait) - catr, 06/10/2015, 16:21
        
        âme hirsute (extrait) - LECTRICE :)), 06/10/2015, 16:27
        
        âme hirsute (extrait) - catr, 06/10/2015, 16:41
        
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