haterage as a salvation

par 411, samedi 21 mars 2015, 13:14 (il y a 3331 jours) @ say it.

Bon. Je ne suis pas fan des insertions d'anglais dans un texte en français. Mais c'est un détail.

Il y a une énergie dans ce texte, et certains très beaux vers, notamment celui-ci, mon préféré:

"je voudrais m'arracher ma femme du corps"

après, c'est aussi vrai que tu tombes un peu dans le cliché, surtout lors de ta fin:

"
je suis la haine de moi
je suis la haine de l'autre
tue-moi vite, tue-moi !
avant que la parole trace mon cadavre
avant sa charogne dans ta bouche"

Le thème haine de moi/haine de l'autre a tellement été rongé que je n'ai pas pu m'empêcher d'y voir un peu d'exagération. Et cette fin me semble vraiment facile.

Mais il y a une énergie, et rien que pour cela, je respecte ce poème même si tue-moi vite ou la charogne dans la bouche.

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